Andrew Savory wrote:
Hi,
Laurie: missed your initial response, presumably due to the list problems Mark mentioned. Anyway, here's my flame ;-)
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Naturally, I've been through this loop a million times over the years, so I won't get embroiled in it now. I've learnt that my views on grammar and written English differ a little from most other people's...
however:
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I agree with asking for proofreaders, but I'd disagree about the readiness of the site. It's not mission-critical: let people see it, they'll soon tell you of the faults!
Here's the rest of my original email, which has the errors I found. I would argue that there are too many to consider the site ready. Sorry...
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I picked up the following on a quick read-through, certainly there are some I missed. Please don't ask me to do this again!
First para could do with a sprinkling of commas and/or colons/semi-colons as it has too many fragmented sentences: actually, this applies throughout the site. Additionally, there is a lot of random capitalisation of words, and many words uncapitalised when they should be. I stopped picking this up after a while.
"speiling misstakes" [and elementary grammar]:
Front page: "So Click" s/b "So click" "self explanitary" s/b "self-explanatory"
Welcome Page: "your probably" which s/b "you're probably" "informations" s/b "information" "My writtings" s/b "My Writing"
Diving: "sharm" s/b "Sharm" "alot" s/b "a lot" "sort" s/b "sorted" "Argonsuts" s/b "Argonauts" "scotland" s/b "Scotland" "upto" s/b " up to" "on the right" s/b "on the left" :^)
Computers: "apple" s/b "Apple" "PC's" s/b "PCs" [more than once] "i" s/b "I" "families" s/b "family's" "pentuim" s/b "Pentium" "down hill" s/b "downhill" "off the shelf" s/b "off-the-shelf" "sounds" s/b "Sounds" "howto" s/b "how to" "basic" s/b "Basic" [more than once] "work Experience" s/b "Work Experience" "BTlabs" s/b "BT Labs" "GCSE's" s/b "'O' Levels" [sorry] s/b "GCSEs" "electronics and computing " s/b "Electronics and Computing" "Learning" s/b "learning" "my self" s/b "myself" "I also during this time" s/b "During this time I also" "an use it exclusively on my home PC" s/b "and use it on my home PC exclusively" "Beir" s/b "Bier" "linux" s/b "Linux" [more than once]
Software: "thats" s/b "that's" "Its against" s/b "It's against" "fundemental" s/b "fundamental" [more than once] "dictated upon by" "dictated upon me by" "beleive" s/b "believe" "things wrong" s/b "things that are wrong" "wont" s/b "won't" "meantion" s/b "mention" "wa" s/b "was" "BTlabs" s/b "BT Labs" "stand allown as a application" s/b "stand alone as an application"
British diving: "to help QUALIFIED divers to improve their diving and be informative"
I'm not sure how your web page will help qualifed divers to be informative, so maybe you meant:
"to be informative and help QUALIFIED divers to improve their diving"
"mis use" s/b "misuse" "mines is" s/b "mine's" or "mine is" "seam" s/b "seam""alot" s/b "a lot" "put of" "put off" "afterwoulds" s/b "afterwards" "wont to by" s/b "want to buy" "wierd" s/b "weird" "don't fit" s/b "doesn't fit" "going to leek" s/b "going to leak" "angel" s/b "angle" "upto" s/b " up to" "nie" s/b "nice" "seperate" s/b "separate" "warn" s/b "worn" "BCD's" s/b "BCDs" "you head" s/b "your head" "peice" s/b "piece" [more than once] "is generally" s/b "are generally" "wieght" s/b "weight" "peopl" s/b "people" "over the top" s/b "over-the-top" "wind up" s/b "wind-up" [more than once] "cieling" s/b "ceiling" "sin't" s/b "isn't"
Trip reports: "center" s/b "centre" "allown" s/b "alone" "continueing" s/b "continuing" "greated" s/b "greeted" "Peire" s/b [?] ""Pierre" "to drunk" s/b "too drunk" "well run" s/b "well-run" "which were" s/b "who were" "to much" s/b "too much" "specail" s/b "special" "aptily" s/b "aptly" "two crowded" s/b "too crowded" "likeing" s/b "liking" "addiquate" s/b "adequate" "pritty" s/b "pretty"
Links: "its here" s/b "it's here" "everyday" s/b "every day" [more than once] "its funny" s/b "it's funny" "hilerious" s/b "hilarious"
Cheers, Laurie.